this seems super rushed, and saitama transigrated?! never mentioned anywhere, seems like it would be an important detail, I only half understand what is going on with the random time skip and inaccurate portrayal of Saitama. This is why I dislike when the mc is a character from something else, yet the author fails to write the character properly. well, it's only chapter 1 so far..
When Evil entered the room, she looked around. Her eyes landed on Aydris, who was lying on the ground, clutching his stomach.
“So, Supremeloli was right. You really did come here to attack Aydris.”
Sorrowful’s smile widened when he heard this.
“So that little ant managed to escape from the basement. I’ll deal with her too, once I’m finished with you two.”
Evil narrowed her eyes. “What makes you think you’re walking out of here alive?”
Suddenly, the space around Sorrowful shattered.
Sorrowful immediately activated his aura shield and blocked the incoming attack.
He then pulled out his obsidian-black sword from his spatial ring and launched an aura-charged strike toward Evil.
Evil instantly teleported to evade the attack and reappeared a moment later. But part of the aura-charged strike had grazed her arm just before she teleported.
Bright red blood dripped from Evil’s arm onto the floor.
effie- athena is literally god of battle tactics and strategy go figure, both use spears, athena's epithet 'promachos' (she who fights in front) is literally effie to a tee, athenas mother was swallowed by zeus while she was pregnant w her like how effie swallows food at an insane rate
sunny- lost from light is pretty obvious but also if we take light to mean apollo, then hes 'lost' from everything he represents i.e. prophecy and oracles- hes fateless. apollo also represents protection of the young which god knows sunny didnt have
kai(my glorious king my goat)- lego ninjago idk.. genuinely cant find anything apart from the fact that in persian kai means king and in ancient greek kai means and.. nightingales represent love, beauty, and melancholy tho so pls help me out and find smth for him
jet - pretty obvious soul reaper means soul reaper idk but she does use a scythe which makes my brain go KRONOS immediately so yeah he castrated the sky w a adamantine scythe if u wanted to know
Aydris stumbled back, his breath catching in his throat.This wasn’t possible. It couldn’t be.
“S-Sorrowful?” His voice cracked, disbelief lacing his words.The man with silver-purple hair took a slow step forward, his eyes gleaming with something unreadable, something between amusement and danger.
“You really thought you could hide from me, Aydris-chan?” Sorrowful’s voice was soft, almost sweet, but it carried a weight that pinned Aydris in place. “You should know better.”
Aydris’s grip tightened around his phone.
Fight or run. He had seconds to decide.
“How did you find me?” His voice trembled, but he forced himself to stand firm.
Sorrowful’s smile widened. “I didn’t need to find you. You never left my sight.”
A shiver ran down Aydris’s spine. “W-What does that mean?”Before he could react, Sorrowful disappeared and reappeared right in front of him, his hand gently reaching for Aydris’s chin, mocking him.
“It means,” Sorrowful whispered, “you were never out of my reach.”
wait... that's what was going on in the basement... are we going to get a gender bent Arthur soon!?
Sorrowful doing experiments.....
why'd sorrowful call him 'her' 💔
I know, loli-chan. But I didn't call you loli. Evil did.😔
so said his name is Saitama but he's not the one punch man? gng what is this... give him an original name, it's going to be hard to read now. 💔
this seems super rushed, and saitama transigrated?! never mentioned anywhere, seems like it would be an important detail, I only half understand what is going on with the random time skip and inaccurate portrayal of Saitama. This is why I dislike when the mc is a character from something else, yet the author fails to write the character properly. well, it's only chapter 1 so far..
sorrow just has too much aura 😔
also whats up with gender bent supreme 🙏😭
Part 4
When Evil entered the room, she looked around. Her eyes landed on Aydris, who was lying on the ground, clutching his stomach.
“So, Supremeloli was right. You really did come here to attack Aydris.”
Sorrowful’s smile widened when he heard this.
“So that little ant managed to escape from the basement. I’ll deal with her too, once I’m finished with you two.”
Evil narrowed her eyes. “What makes you think you’re walking out of here alive?”
Suddenly, the space around Sorrowful shattered.
Sorrowful immediately activated his aura shield and blocked the incoming attack.
He then pulled out his obsidian-black sword from his spatial ring and launched an aura-charged strike toward Evil.
Evil instantly teleported to evade the attack and reappeared a moment later. But part of the aura-charged strike had grazed her arm just before she teleported.
Bright red blood dripped from Evil’s arm onto the floor.
it's okay, other stories will be fighting to reference your fanfic...
All these talks about myths are flying over my head maybe I'm not cut out to be a writer I could never make a story with such references...
i could never use my brain this much.. 💔
effie- athena is literally god of battle tactics and strategy go figure, both use spears, athena's epithet 'promachos' (she who fights in front) is literally effie to a tee, athenas mother was swallowed by zeus while she was pregnant w her like how effie swallows food at an insane rate
sunny- lost from light is pretty obvious but also if we take light to mean apollo, then hes 'lost' from everything he represents i.e. prophecy and oracles- hes fateless. apollo also represents protection of the young which god knows sunny didnt have
kai(my glorious king my goat)- lego ninjago idk.. genuinely cant find anything apart from the fact that in persian kai means king and in ancient greek kai means and.. nightingales represent love, beauty, and melancholy tho so pls help me out and find smth for him
jet - pretty obvious soul reaper means soul reaper idk but she does use a scythe which makes my brain go KRONOS immediately so yeah he castrated the sky w a adamantine scythe if u wanted to know
peak writing... 🔥
Sorrowful tryna rizz you up i see..
Part 2
Aydris stumbled back, his breath catching in his throat.This wasn’t possible. It couldn’t be.
“S-Sorrowful?” His voice cracked, disbelief lacing his words.The man with silver-purple hair took a slow step forward, his eyes gleaming with something unreadable, something between amusement and danger.
“You really thought you could hide from me, Aydris-chan?” Sorrowful’s voice was soft, almost sweet, but it carried a weight that pinned Aydris in place. “You should know better.”
Aydris’s grip tightened around his phone.
Fight or run. He had seconds to decide.
“How did you find me?” His voice trembled, but he forced himself to stand firm.
Sorrowful’s smile widened. “I didn’t need to find you. You never left my sight.”
A shiver ran down Aydris’s spine. “W-What does that mean?”Before he could react, Sorrowful disappeared and reappeared right in front of him, his hand gently reaching for Aydris’s chin, mocking him.
“It means,” Sorrowful whispered, “you were never out of my reach.”
pause..?
Wha happened can you fill me up? 😭
one collected.